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So, here's something I've wanted to try for a little while, and I found a similar forum that encouraged me to go for it.

This is one of my favorite lines from my WIP:

"The sound of the turnip splattering was almost as disgusting as the feel of the rotten flesh spewing on my ankles."  (It also happens to be my opening line).

So what's one of your favorite lines you've written? Or a favorite line you've read? Just be sure to give credit due when you didn't write it.

Let's have fun with this and get some good lines flying around! And if there are some bad ones out there, suggest to the author how to make it better (nicely, remember).

P.S.  *Poor example* Read Bearing Secrets by Richard Barre:
"As he turned and faced forward, the seat made a rich leathery sound."
I know what you're trying to say, but COME ON! You can do better than that!

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  1. Eric SwedinMarch 9, 2010 at 6:14 PM

    Some first lines from my novels:

    Major John Carter learned to hate the Nazis the day that he stood in Dachau before a pile of emaciated corpses.

    Earth was not his real home.

    Lucian was fifteen years old, big for his age and already tall as a man, when he stood still and watched his father beaten by their master.

    Syndi Minogue spread her wings and dropped away from the jagged edge of the cliff.

    Eric

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  2. Heidi ThornockMarch 17, 2010 at 12:27 PM

    I especially like the last one!

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